Review of Essay: Essay 1 Has the Internet Improved or Damaged Our Social and Personal Relationships?

I found the essay to be rather vapid, I didn't find it enthralling at all. It had some good points in what the author was explaining, but at the same time I found it hard to follow. I found myself quickly becoming uninterested in points, as some just seemed to be over explored, while others not explored enough. The punctuation and spelling is all over the place while mostly good there are moments that don't have the correct spelling or punctuation. Overall I think that the essay has good points but is lacking in the way it is explained.